Voices

Jaibala/ June 3, 2015/ Short Stories/ 29 comments

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“I like him,” I declared. The buzzing stopped and it suddenly got quiet. I was not used to this. Just when I was getting uncomfortable with the silence, Trisha said, “He is okay that way, likeable, but way below your standards.”

Vani interrupted her, “Who are you to decide her standards, she is capable of setting her own standards.”

“We know nothing about him except his name. What was his name…” came Trisha’s retort

“Arjun”, I replied, “Arjun Rana, studies in first year B.Com, shares his economics class with me.”

“Shares his economics class”, laughed out Trisha, “it is not your class to share.”

“The point is, Shikha likes him, we should find out more about him.” Vani’s calm voice brought the discussion back to the point.

Vani was always my biggest supporter, and Trisha was always opposed. I knew this discussion was pointless, it would  just end up being a screaming match between both of them.

“Well it will just be more of the old, she tries something new, she will be wrong and we will have to fix it.” Trisha was saying.

“So what; she does not try at all, well that is just so lame”, Vani argued.

The voices in my head are getting louder. I am so scared; I think that I will stop hearing myself someday, and the voices are all that will remain. I can’t hear myself scream, it is only the voices and the voices I will not be able to escape.

“Stop it,” came the firm Motherly voice, “let her do what she wishes to, and then we do what we have to. At least give her the freedom of choice.” We never knew who this voice belonged to. We just knew she was God Mother, and all of us obeyed her in one voice.

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Academically a Microbiologist, I am a Web Columnist for popular magazines and websites, Freelance Writer and a Blogger. Words define me and writing and reading compete to be the love of my life. My biggest belief is that there is something good in everything and I always looks to highlight the best in things. Creative writing is my forte.You can reach me by dropping a mail at contact@jaibalarao.com

29 Comments

  1. What a different take on the prompt! I agree with the voices Jaibala, wonderfully explained. I hope you are writing a bigger story.

    1. Inderpreet I am really glad that you liked it. Bigger story, I havent thought about it, but I always believe never say never.

  2. That was complicated and creepy!
    We all have voices in our heads – but mine usually tell me to go ahead and dare eat that last chocolate bar or ice cream cup 😛
    That was neatly done Jai.. very neatly done . Missed reading you! 😀

    1. Pix is back Yay 😀 I knew you would like this story. And when you say neatly done it makes me so happy 🙂 I missed you so so much. <3

  3. Interesting concept, and well written.

    1. Thanks Vi 🙂

  4. The age old conflict with the voices in our heads! Great take on the prompt. When I read “god mother” Shailaja’s name came to mind. 😀

    1. Thanks Debbie. As for Godmother, we do all follow her in one voice. 🙂

  5. Creative take on the prompt: like it! And curious, is Godmother who we think she is? Ahem, in our midst? 😉 <3

    1. Elly Thanks a lot. Oh Godmother is everywhere. We just need to look 😉 <3

  6. Ooooh It can lead to a really twisted murder msytery. This was a prelude, maybe? Loved it Jaiyyo!

    1. Sfoo 😀 it could be wonderfully “executed”. Hain na?

  7. Hi Jaibala,
    This is my first time here. Voices in the head- very intriguing! I liked your execution of a challenging concept. Cool take on the prompt. Will be back for more.Cheers!
    -Shantala

    1. Shantala glad to see you here, even more so cause you liked it. Yes I was always fascinated by this concept. It must be very crowded in the head when onee starts hearing Voices. Thanks 🙂

  8. Wonderfully written…

    1. Thank You Fathi 🙂

  9. inner voices…….always there…..a good take on the prompt…..

    1. Thank You Sunaina 🙂

  10. I like the rendition here. Voices in the head is a great take on the prompt and kept me guessing. And ahem, Godmother? Should I be worried? 😉

    1. Your comment brought such a big smile on my face. Thank You 🙂 And the Godmother is the voice of reason, so unless you plan poke me with ypur pointy shoes or scream at me in my head, no reason to worry 🙂

  11. oh the voices in the head… brilliantly portrayed.

    1. Thanks Rajlakshmi 🙂

  12. That was so good, Jaibala! And, a bit scary, as well. Worrisome, rather.

    1. Well Shilpa , if you say Worrisome then I would take it as a compliment. It was meant to worry, and scare. Thank You 🙂

  13. So, Vani is the heart and Trisha is the mind, arguing about what decision to make, and the God Mother is a neutral voice saying whatever the battle, the final decision is yours? 🙂

    1. It was more like Voices in the head….but yes your point of view works too. 🙂

  14. Ooh… voices in the head. Quite a difficult concept to explore, but you seem to have done it well. Nice write up for the prompt, Jaibala.

    1. Thanks Sid. This has always fascinated me. I just wonder how hard it must be for them to take even the simplest of decisions. That is what led to this. 🙂

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