Contentment

Jaibala/ September 21, 2014/ Poetry/ 13 comments

This is my first attempt at a really difficult form the Haiku. I know there is a lot of room for improvement. Looking forward for the feedback. The prompt was “Use the word “Purr” or “Bow wow” or both creatively in a Haiku of 17 syllables in the form of 5-7-5.”


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after begging days

a hungry body is fed

a content heart purrs

“Linking this post to the poetry challenge Β for Verses @PonderingTwo


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Academically a Microbiologist, I am a Web Columnist for popular magazines and websites, Freelance Writer and a Blogger. Words define me and writing and reading compete to be the love of my life. My biggest belief is that there is something good in everything and I always looks to highlight the best in things. Creative writing is my forte.You can reach me by dropping a mail at contact@jaibalarao.com

13 Comments

  1. Jaibala, this is a very nicely composed Haiku. For being the first attempt, it is perfect!

    1. Thank you so much Usha Ji. This is such a boost, will attempt one again soon πŸ™‚

  2. Here’s to hoping that that hungry person never had to go hungry again!
    Well expressed.
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    1. Thanks Sreesha. I hope that hunger is a problem we eliminate soon.

  3. I thought this was a pretty brilliant use of the given word. Smart πŸ™‚
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    1. Thanks Doc. I guess, thinking outside the box worked for me here πŸ™‚

  4. This is so nicely done !! You are improving by leaps and bounds in writing haiku… A touching tale told so effectively… I guess that’s the power of words!

    Thank you so much for linking the post!

    Do drop by for the next prompt on 30th sept. Cheers!!

    1. Thank You Rohan. Coming from you that compliment makes me happy πŸ™‚

  5. you know – I think you are brilliant!
    it is so difficult to write a Haiku and you wrote one that not only meets all the “rules” but is also easy to understand for Haiku-illiterates like me!

    1. Well I consider myself a Haiku Illiterate too. I am glad you liked it Pixie πŸ™‚

    1. Very nice, Jb πŸ™‚ I haven’t written 5-7-5 in ages, and this reminds me so much of my old style. A very satisfying poem, because the person has finally had a meal after a long time, and you’ve written back-to-back days too after a while. A little poignant to read of the starvation of course.

      1. Well, I am glad you liked it. I know it does not meet your standards of a haiku, but will try to get better at it. And I am glad that the meal was a very satisfying one for you too πŸ™‚ Right Now I am just estatic at having attempted it πŸ™‚

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