NaPoWriMo: Friends

Jaibala/ April 6, 2014/ Poetry/ 21 comments

Today’s Promptfor the NaPoWriMo  had me stumped for quite sometime.

“Today’s prompt is a little complicated, which is why I saved it for a Saturday, in the hopes that you might have a little more time today than during a weekday. I think this is a very rewarding form, though, so I hope you’ll enjoy it! Today I challenge you to write a “golden shovel.” This form was invented by Terrance Hayes in his poem, The Golden Shovel. The last word of each line of Hayes’ poem is a word from Gwendolyn Brooks’ poem We Real Cool. You can read Brooks’ poem by reading the last word of each line of Hayes’ poem! (In fact, you can do so twice, because Hayes, being ultra-ambitious, wrote a two-part golden shovel, repeating Brooks’ poem). Now, the golden shovel is a tricky form, but you can help keep it manageable by picking a short poem to shovel-ize. And there’s no need to double-up the poem you pick, like Hayes did. Here are a few possibilities to work from:


Green Buddhas
On the fruit stand.
We eat the smile
And spit out the teeth.

-Charles Simic



Their relationship consisted
In discussing if it existed.

-Thom Gunn

First Fig

My candle burns at both ends;
It will not last the night;
But ah, my foes, and oh, my friends—
It gives a lovely light!

-Edna St. Vincent Millay

Happy writing!”

Ok, so we had to write a poem Using the words of a Another poem as the last word of each line. Stumped for so long, I was thinking of ditching the prompt. But my dear friend Nirmal would not allow me to ditch the prompt.  So then I thought this one deserves to be written for those people who never let me give up on anything that I have ever dreamt of.

The poem that I chose is Soul unto itself by Emily Dickinson





Life lost wars, the

badgering of the soul,

Made me lost unto,

every battle itself,

The truth is,

You came to me an

Angel, a saviour, like the Knights Imperial,

And told me you were my friend,

Never let me shed a tear or,

Pain and sadness feel,

Took away all the hurt agonizing,

Stood like a strong wall, an

Impedance to the Enemy,

Try as hard It could,

Away you would send,

And now I am so secure,

The pain won’t win against,

All the love I have gained, its

a fact that You are more than my own,

I know there is nothing, no treason,

that can be committed by you, it

Is true everything you are and , I can

feel no pain shame or fear,

I know the will world be itself,

and not change for the likes of me, its

Me that has to learn to be free and sovereign,

The art that you taught to me, of

knowing hope, strength and life itself,

of reaching in my soul,

Of living life positively, and should,

Tall and proud I stand,

Because you believed in me, and were my friend, in

Us and friendship I believe as the world looks at us in awe.

Listed below are my fellow NaPoWriMo Participants – – Nirmal – Sfurti  – Janaki – Pooja – count –  Naina – Rohan – Karan – Rinzu – Vinay  – Nithya – Preeti


About Jaibala

Academically a Microbiologist, I am a Web Columnist for popular magazines and websites, Freelance Writer and a Blogger. Words define me and writing and reading compete to be the love of my life. My biggest belief is that there is something good in everything and I always looks to highlight the best in things. Creative writing is my forte.You can reach me by dropping a mail at


    1. Thank You Rohan 🙂

  1. Beautiful Jai..Glad you have such great friends. 🙂

    1. Thanks Pooja…..blessed more like it 🙂

  2. Aah beautiful Jai…what better way to acknowledge friendship 😀

    1. Thanks sfurti 🙂

  3. If I write something I might cry so instead I’m giving you these:- <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
    P.S. Never letting you give up.

    1. Love you too for never letting me give up and all that love safely stored in my heart <3

  4. I am glad you didn’t give up 🙂 the poem is good one!

    However, I don’t quite like the boldened last words. It takes away from this poem I feel 🙁 coz once your readers see the words in bold and read about the form, they inadvertently start trying to read the shovel poem from the bold words.

    1. Thank You well It takes a few seconds to un bold (if that is even a word)…doing that now…thank you for the feed back 🙂

  5. Oh I love poems written for friends, I feel your heart in this one. Thank you for sharing it. I’m glad you didn’t give up!

    Visiting from

    1. Thank You Morgan…..I am glad I did noy give up too 🙂

  6. Hats of to good friends. 🙂

    1. True That Janaki 🙂

  7. Beautiful poem it was.

    1. Thank You so much Rekha 🙂

  8. Awesome Jai. It comes directly from your heart I can feel it. And I am honoured to be one of your friends.

    1. Thanks Niths…..I am honoured to be yours <3

  9. Lovely write Jai 🙂 <3 Awwwww thank you so much for dedicating this poem to all of us 🙂 Love you Jai <3

    1. Thank You but Preeths I did not understand some words there…Love you too <3

      1. “I did not understand some words there” 😮

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