That Moment on Holi

Jaibala/ September 10, 2016/ Short Stories/ 25 comments

It had taken Neha a lot of courage and convincing to come out. Holi was his favourite festival. But an assurance from her friends that he would not be there was enough to ease her anxiousness eventually. Neha was looking forward to going out and having fun with her friends. She had spent a few months in the relationship with Ravi all alone. She needed to reconnect with her old self. A moment or two of fun, to forget the last few months.

When she had met him for the first time, it was his smile that she noticed. The smile drew her in and kept her there. She was swept off her feet and into a relationship before she could think about what was happening. Ravi was perfect for her, he soul mate in every sense. Ravi was her dreams being manifested in reality. And so she let herself be led to wherever he was going. By the time Neha had realised it was a dark dreary dungeon and not her palace of dreams, it was late.

Neha had been cut her off from family and friends and Ravi had her hooked to him for survival. Until one day Neha realised her she could break free and did. But the fear he managed to instill in her was still there. Eventually, her friends and family helped her overcome that slowly by going out of their way and making her experience life again.

This holi celebration was supposed to be just that. And Neha was beginning to feel happy and comfortable in her skin again. That is when she saw that smile. In that moment fear gripped her and she regretted agreeing to this. “He was not supposed to be here”, she screamed aloud in her head.   She did not trust the very people who had brought her here. Someone had to have told him, was her conclusion

“I should never have come here”, Neha watched as Ravi walked toward her. Even with all the colour on his face she knew it was him. Neha knew that smile, the gentle child like smile that had fooled her in the first place. As he came closer she warned herself to not let anything suck her back in. It had taken her a lot of courage to break free.
Ravi continued walking and passed her. Neha was surprised that nothing happened until she felt it. Her face was on fire. Neha grimaced in pain and felt nothing except severe burning. The last thing she saw as she fell to the ground unconscious was a glimpse of that smile again.

 

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Academically a Microbiologist, I am a Web Columnist for popular magazines and websites, Freelance Writer and a Blogger. Words define me and writing and reading compete to be the love of my life. My biggest belief is that there is something good in everything and I always looks to highlight the best in things. Creative writing is my forte.You can reach me by dropping a mail at contact@jaibalarao.com

25 Comments

  1. Such a sad ending,, I really hope there is a better punishing system in place which does not take such a long time to sentence any one. Some men are so unimaginably cruel!!
    Menaka Bharathi recently posted…Danteras – 5 Things in Gold You Can BuyMy Profile

    1. Yes some people are very cruel. I hope that there is a better system in place for such heinous crimes.

  2. Sigh!
    Hope things change soon. It’s a piece of fiction alright, but this is an everyday affair in some towns and cities still.
    Sid recently posted…Travel Blues and Wanderlust bugsMy Profile

    1. True, there is more reality in this piece of fiction than most.

  3. Oh no… that was so heartbreaking. The fact that this is also the truth of many women makes it even more heart wrenching. These criminals should be harshly punished.
    Rajlakshmi recently posted…[Photo Blog] A trip to Wayanad, IndiaMy Profile

    1. YEs they should be punished. Thank You for reading

  4. The horrible part is you can buy this life destroying thing openly forRs 30 in a neighbourhood shop.
    Punishment for such sick people is not enough.
    Dr.Amrita Basu (Misra) recently posted…Healthier mothers and babies:Mommy stay with meMy Profile

    1. Yes the availability of Acid so easily should and must stop. Punishment is not enough, we need stronger laws when it comes to sale of acid.

  5. OMG… men like these should rot in hell. This is actually the reality of our society where men don’t think twice before commiting such crimes. Nicely written Jai
    Tina Basu recently posted…Mini Apple PieMy Profile

    1. I so agree Tina, egotistical men who don’t think twice need to be punished fr their actions. Thank You

  6. Men can be such beasts! I almost hoped for a happier ending, but I like this one – it’s real and raw.
    Modern Gypsy recently posted…Adult coloring books and the creativity mythMy Profile

    1. I toyed with the idea of making it a happy ending, but this story needed to be told.

  7. Oh wow! That was intense! Just when I thought Neha was getting back to herself… ahh, even reading this hurts.
    Wonderful writing and very sensitive subject. Bravo!

    1. Thank You so much Nisha.

  8. OMG…a sad end. Such devils should be punished such that they feel that fear.

    1. Yes they should be punished. It is absolutely horrifying.

  9. What a sad ending, I was hoping for a different ending, alas it turned out to be something else. Nicely penned!
    Rashmi recently posted…Ele Ashtami GowriMy Profile

  10. That was horrible. Just does that some evil people will do just about anything to get their revenge. So very sad.

    1. There were a lot of things I read lately that made me write this story. So many evil things that people do.

  11. Oh! Sad end to a gripping story. We always hope for happy endings but sometimes it also holds great maturity when one delivers the harsh reality. Nice write up, Jai!
    Saumy Nagayach recently posted…आज फिर एक बार बिरहा की घड़ी आयी …My Profile

    1. I debated a lot about the ending, but I wanted to show how far people can go for satisfying their own ego. Thank You Saumy.

  12. Oh..what a sad ending..Such men should be hanged..such a cruelty 🙁

    1. I agree they should Deepa

  13. Oh dear! I was hoping this story would end well but the actions of a spurned lover are terrible, I know. What beasts men can be!
    Shailaja Vishwanath recently posted…Am I Making Enough Memories?My Profile

    1. Honestly if I tried to write a different ending, this story would not be. There are so many who feel the need for retribution, because they feel hurt.

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